Some Points to Improve
The checkerboard design makes it very difficult to focus
With the four white birds, there are too many points of focus, too many areas for the eyes to dart between
It is unclear what the main point of focus is
The New Version
The changes I made:
I switched out the checker plane for one with a dark blue solid colour.
I lost all the birds except for the one with the hat. I also added some darker tones to the bird to make the brighter areas stand out more.
I toned down Felix and his scarf by adding some grey and black, so there wasn’t so much orange left.
I muted the aircraft marking right down.
Over To You
Take a look over some of you own cartoons. Is there one that you really like the idea of, but doesn’t look quite right? Look over the following three points and see if they help you to identify points to change. It may help you to make notes from your drawing, as I did previously.
What is the main point of focus?
Are there any areas of colour that distract away from the main point of focus?
Are there any elements the distract away from the main point of focus?